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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
the
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 pie chart illustrates the
precentage
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percentage
 of human study students
worked
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who worked
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 in different stages full-time, part-time.
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, the highest number of
worker
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workers
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 had been doing full-time jobs at 52%. 8% of them in two stages
were
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was
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 the lowest
avrage
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average
 of
totall
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total
 in not known and
fulltime
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full-time
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post grad
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post-graduate
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 study. The
hugest
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highest
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 salary is for
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
 sector 50%, reaching over 100,000$ after five years.
Part time
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works
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work
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were
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was
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 15%.
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,
anthropologist
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an anthropologist
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 who was unemployed 12%.
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,
full- time post grade
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full-time postgraduate
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 study was
as
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apply
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similar
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as unknow
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an unknown
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 anthropologist after
graduated
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graduating
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. First of all, their salaries were 5%. Afterwards, it saw a significant increase, reaching 40% in freelance
consultant
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consultants
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. In private companies
at
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, at
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first
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 experienced 10% to 35%. After that, it decreased gradually , reaching 25%. It reached 30%
at the end
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 of five years.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate
  • degree
  • university
  • activity
  • work
  • salary
  • culture
  • research
  • education
  • institution
  • percentage
  • pathway
  • popular
  • analyze
  • difference
  • position
  • experience
  • outcome
  • highest
  • lowest
  • average
  • satisfaction
  • compare
  • contrast
  • level
  • field
  • focus
  • title
  • role
  • graduate degree
  • research degree
  • cultural expert
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