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The chart below illustrates the primary factors influencing students’ decisions to attend a particular university in the UK in the years 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below illustrates the primary factors influencing students’ decisions to attend a particular university in the UK in the years 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the primary factors that influenced
students
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' choice of a particular
university
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 in the UK in the years 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, the most common reason for
university
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 selection in both years was the availability of suitable degree courses. Notable changes occurred in preferences for extracurricular activities and proximity to the parental home over the ten-year period. In 1995, suitable degree programs were cited by 35% of
students
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, making it the most influential factor
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almost twice the proportion of those who selected the
university
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 for its sports and social activities (18%). The
quality
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 of study resources was the second most common factor at just over 20%,
while
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 the
quality
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 of teaching influenced 15% of
students
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. The
university
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's proximity to the parental home was the least cited reason at just 10%. By 2005, the percentage of
students
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 choosing the
university
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 for its degree programs had risen slightly to 37%. Proximity to home saw a significant increase, doubling to 22%, making it the second most cited reason.
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, the importance of
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quality
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the quality
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 of resources fell by about 5 percentage points. The share of
students
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prioritizing
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 sports and social activities dropped dramatically to 6%, making it the least influential factor in that year. Meanwhile, teaching
quality
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 rose modestly, accounting for 18% of student decisions.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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