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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the percentage of
food
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 and
goods
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 purchased from supermarkets in three different countries in 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, all three countries experienced an upward trend in supermarket shopping over the decade, with
country
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 A showing the most notable increase in both
food
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 and
goods
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. Throughout the period,
country
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C
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 consistently recorded the lowest proportions. In 1998,
food
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 purchases from supermarkets were highest in
country
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 B at 22%, followed by
country
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 A at 10%.
Country
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C
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 reported the lowest figure, at just over 5%. By 2008,
country
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 A saw a significant increase in
food
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 purchases, reaching 35%,
while
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country
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 B rose slightly to 27%.
Country
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C
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also
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 experienced modest growth, increasing by 3 percentage points, but still lagged far behind the other two. As for
goods
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,
country
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 B again led in 1998, with 24% of
goods
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 bought from supermarkets.
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 figure was six times higher than
country
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 A’s (around 4%) and twelve times higher than
country
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C
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’s (approximately 2%). Over the next ten years,
country
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 A witnessed a dramatic surge, with supermarket purchases of
goods
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 rising by 29 percentage points to become the highest
overall
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.
Country
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C
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also
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 experienced a noticeable rise to 15%,
while
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country
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 B’s growth was minimal, reaching only 26% in 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, country, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • increase
  • rise
  • lower
  • highest
  • trend
  • shopping habits
  • convenience
  • variety
  • food
  • goods
  • local markets
  • popular
  • significantly
  • suggests
  • shows
  • countries
  • European
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