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The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the information on the
percentage
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 of Canadians who gave money to charitable in the
age
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 range for the years 2000 and 2015s .In
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According to
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 what
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show
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data
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, the
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ofpercentage
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of
 the
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 aged 18 to 24 the
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show
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 20% in the 2000s , but in 2015
show
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 the
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 lowest , 10% Moving to the
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 of 24 to 34
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 the
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 difference is less in 2015.
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,in 2000,the
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 increased in the
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group
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 of 35 to 49, which was around 40 %. To complete the information
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, in 2015, growth was shown in the
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 of 50 to 64 , around 40%.
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, the
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 of
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 65 and over lowest compared to the
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 50 to 64. In conclusion,the
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 shows
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information about charity in Canada.
While
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 the range shows the
age
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 of 35 to 49 increased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, show, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age range
  • charitable organisations
  • fluctuates
  • notable changes
  • participation
  • considerable decrease
  • contrast
  • consistent increase
  • middle age groups
  • peak
  • notable drop
  • shift
  • financial priorities
  • economic circumstances
  • demographic
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