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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. comics books radio television film threatre

In today's era,
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 is impossible to imagine
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 without mass media, which play a vital role in everyone's
life
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. There are different types of media for providing information, but in my
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, the one
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 most influential is television. I will be explaining
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the pros
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 and cons of the influence on people's
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due to
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 these communication mediums.
Firstly
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, radios are better for communication
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 situations like natural
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disasters
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,
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 people are trying to get information from the government and nearby relief providers with
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 resources available. The major drawback of radios can be seen in countries which are under dictatorship,
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 the falsified information is generally being
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spread
 through
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 medium of communication. Alternatively, the more advanced method of mass media
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 part of everyone's daily
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 is television
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 has both audio and visual
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apply
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effects. Recently, Netflix and other online platforms have added
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a large
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 number of movies and shows
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 has
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its
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 popularity and usage to
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 extent. People are spending time with family and friends
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 utilising these streaming services. When these organisations become
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greedy
, they start showing advertisements, which can influence
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the decision
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decision
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decisions
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 of
audience
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the audience
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accrding
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according
 to the money given by specific brands. So, some measures need to be put in place to control the adverse
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effects
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 of these methods.
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, television
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provides
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the
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apply
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great value in everyone's day-to-day
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 with the advancement of technology. Some organisations are gaining more benefits by giving money for advertisements.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state both sides for each medium and provide more depth on their advantages and disadvantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use connectives like ‘firstly’, ‘secondly’, and ‘finally’ to improve the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
Try to give specific examples for each type of media to strengthen your points.
Task Achievement
Your introduction gives a clear stance on the topic, which is good.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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