2.Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many individuals consider that capital
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should not be used
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others argue that it should be allowed for serious
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. In my opinion , capital
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is
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necessary rule and it should be used for serious
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. On the first hand , capital
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should be allowed for
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serious
crimes
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for some reasons because the serious
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crime
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really dangerous and
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also
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committed
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serious
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crimes
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threat to society
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and
it
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which
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affects everybody too much .
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, criminals usually make serious mistakes and of course that they make the most serious mistake
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they have to be hit by the hardest rule .
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, if the individual has killed anyone or sells drugs , ketamine will be the most serious
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and
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they will have the hardest
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, there might be some negative consequences caused by not applying capital
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of law , the community will not fear the government
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they will
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change
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to the criminal . Of course
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they will easily make mistakes and come up as criminals in their
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mind
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, not making the important rule will make them feel
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and have a second chance to
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the
crime
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again .
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, when the criminal commits
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crime
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like
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murder
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serious
crime
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but
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just has to
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light punishments
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the family of the victim will feel unfair . In conclusion , I think capital
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is really important for the law and for the community. It will protect the president from
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person who has an evil mind .

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task achievement
Make sure to explain your ideas more clearly. Some points are hard to understand.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to help the flow of your writing. This will make it easier to read.
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Try to develop your arguments further. More details and examples will help strengthen your points.
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You present both sides of the argument which is good.
coherence cohesion
Your opinion is clear in the introduction and conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • deterrent
  • crime
  • serious offenses
  • justice
  • victims
  • closure
  • life imprisonment
  • rehabilitation
  • legal system
  • fairness
  • wrongful convictions
  • moral
  • public opinion
  • perspectives
  • debate
  • effective
  • punishment
  • families
  • contribute
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