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The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The chart illustrates distances traveled per person per week (in kilometers) in terms of 5 types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
The bar chart shows the number of
kilometers traveled
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kilometres travelled
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 per
individuals
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individual
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in
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apply
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per
week
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of
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by
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 five different
of
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modes of
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transports
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transport
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 in the UK in 1990 and 2000.
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,
total
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the total
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 tended to increase from 1990 to 2000
and
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, and
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frequency
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the frequency
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 of movement of residents increased, especially
favoring
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favouring
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 bus and rail
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while
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, while
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bicycle
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, motorbike and air were less chosen. First of all, total distances
traveled
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travelled
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 by people in the UK in 1990 were 100
km
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 per
week
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 and in 2000 reached 110
km
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 per
week
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.
Besides
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, the distances moved by bus were highest with 40
km
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 in 1990 and rose slightly in 2000. People chose moving by rail less than by bus
with
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, with
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 37
km
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 in 1990
and
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, and
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also
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 increased insignificantly in 2000.
While
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bicycle
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bicycles
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,
motorbike
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motorbikes
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 and air
were
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travel were
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traveled
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used
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 much less than
two
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the two
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 types of above
transports
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apply
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. In 1990,
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 just reached 4
km
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 per
week
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,
then
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 decreased in 2000
with
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to
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 only about 1
km
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. Motorbike was chosen more than
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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about
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by about
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 1
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km
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km,
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that
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which
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 was 5
km
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 per
week
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 in 1990 and 2
km
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 in 2000.
However
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, air tended to increase
but
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, but
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 not significantly.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, bicycle, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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