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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives the proportions
about
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of
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 the birth of people who live in
Australia
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and
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, and
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 the table shows
places
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the places
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 where people born in these countries live.
Overall
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, following the pie chart,
Australia
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is accounting
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accounts
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 for the most,
while
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 the others are the lowest. For the table, almost all the individuals live in cities and have more than
rural
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in rural
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areas
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. In
Australia
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, the local population is the highest with 73%,after that
the
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 second highest one is
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 at 14%. Meanwhile, individuals from the
UK
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, New Zealand, and China contributed 7%, 3%, and 2% respectively. The smallest group,
labeled
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 as "Others," made up just 1%. The rate of Chinese living in the city
is accounting
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accounts
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 for the highest among countries
with
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 99%,
thus
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 for the rural
areas
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 it is the lowest at 1%.
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, New Zealand uses up to 20% in rural
areas
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while
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 using at least 80% The Netherlands,
UK
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 and
Australia
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 all share a similar trend of higher urban than rural populations
with
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 90%, 89% and 83% of the Netherlands,
UK
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 and
Australia
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 in urban and rural
areas
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respectively
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compared
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 to 17% in
Australia
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, 11% in the
UK
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 and 10% in New Zealand.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, areas, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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