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The chart shows the information relating to people within 15-minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant

The chart shows the information relating to people within 15-minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant
The chart illustrates the information relating to
people
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 within 15-
minutes
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15-minute
 drive service in a particular region in
UK
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the UK
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Overall
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, the percentage of
people
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 living in the urban
areas
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 who approach the service is the highest
but
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, but
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 the proportion of
people
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 living in rural
areas
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 is hard to approach through the period
especially
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, especially
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Post
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the Post
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 office and Secondary
school
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. The proportion of
people
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 in the urban area of Doctor and Post office
are
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is
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 the same
with
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, with
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 100
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percent
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per cent
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and
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, and
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 the percentage of
people
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 in the rural area of Doctor is still the highest
with
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, with
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 100
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percent
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per cent
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while
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, while
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 the figure of
people
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 in the rural area of the Post office is the second highest at over 90
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percent
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per cent
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. The amount of population of
people
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 living in urban
areas
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 of Primary
school
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 and Secondary
school
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are
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is
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 the same
with
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, with
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 100
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 the percentage of
people
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 living in rural
areas
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 of Primary
school
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 is about 65
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percent
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per cent
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and
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, and
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 Secondary
school
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 is 100
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percent
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per cent
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.
People
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 living in urban
areas
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 of Primary
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school
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apply
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and Secondary
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school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
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 use
drive
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the drive
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 service the
highest
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most
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas, school, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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