The maps below show land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built

The maps below show land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built
The map illustrates the transformation which took place in a land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the land has changed a lot
since
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between
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1980 to 2000. The largest changes are the development of hydroelectric power and bringing the electricity to the land. In 1980, for the sake of nature and
environment
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the environment
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, there was a river that flowed from the north to the south and around the area. On the left of the
river
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river,
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there was a big forest, which was the place for rare plants and animals.
Moreover
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, it had an ancient structure near the forest and
on
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to
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the
south west
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southwest
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were irrigated farmland.
Then
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for
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, for
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people, there was a
village
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near the irrigated farmland
and
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, and
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there is no sign of corporate development or modern infrastructure. For the
last
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one were the places of mountains which were in the
south east
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southeast
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, and played a natural role to be sustainable in both maps. In the 2000 map, after building the hydroelectric, the biggest change was the river
which
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, which
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in the past was held, forming a large pond in the centre of the map and the hydroelectric was built in the south. The new environment and activities, rare plants and animals were significantly disappearing, possible flooding, as were ancient structures that were to be destroyed.Fishing was appearing on the lake, a new activity with the
water face
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waterfront
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. Infrastructure development and people.The old
village
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disappeared:
a
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and a
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new
village
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with an electrical system
built
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was built
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in the southeast .A Hotel was newly built near the new
village
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, which could be used to serve tourists or workers. Electricity appears along the path from the dam.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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