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The line graph shows the number of immigrants to 3 different countries (USA, Canada, Australia) from 1991 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of immigrants to 3 different countries (USA, Canada, Australia) from 1991 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
line
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 graph provides an overview of the changes
of
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in
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 immigrants to three different countries: the USA, Canada,
Australia
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and Australia
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from
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, from
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 1991 to 2001.
Overall
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, we can easily information that the
line
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 presenting the
immigrants
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apply
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number to
america
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America
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seem
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 to increase sustainable throughout each year. On the contract, the
line
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 of Australia has a
decrease
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 trend
while
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 the number of
canada
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Canada
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 always
change
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changes
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 year.
First,
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the
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canada
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Canada
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 began to process with 500 and continued to reach the
peaks
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peak
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2300
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of 2300
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 in the years between 1994 and 1996
,
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;
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however
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 it tended to fall
significant
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significantly
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down
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to
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1000 approximately
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approximately 1000
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 in 1996 and
remain
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remained
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at the
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the
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this
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figure
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level
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 throughout the
times
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period
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 from 1996 to 1999. After the year 1999, the
line
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 started to improve again 1600 in 2000. The USA started with only 1200 in 1991 and increased to reach the remarkable peak in the 2000s with 2500 to become the
countries
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country
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 with the biggest figure. Unlike Australia, where it began with the highest by about 2600 and
the
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then
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 decreased
trend
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to reach the lowest figures in 1995 with 500.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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