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the maps illustrate land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built

the maps illustrate land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built
The map illustrates the difference
of
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 the
land
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area
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 before and after a hydroelectric power dam was built.
Overall
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, the
land
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 has changed a lot since 1980 to 2000, and large changes to the natural
land
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 and urban development. Regarding the beginning time,
this
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area
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 has the long
river
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 from north to south, and flow around
area
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, in the left of
river
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 has a large forest, where is habitat of rare plants and animals, and in the next of forest, it has an ancient structures and in the southern has some irrigated farmland;
besides
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,
this
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land
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area
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 has a small village nearby irrigated farmland, and
this
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area
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 does not appear the development of agricultural or modern facilities; at the same time, having some mountains in south, which plays stable natural role in 2 maps. Regarding the next time, after adding a hydroelectric dam,
this
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area
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 has a significant change in the flow of
river
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, the old
river
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 is prevented by a bright, and made a large in the central map, and a hydroelectric dam was built in south, and
this
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 change made the new environment,
due to
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 the fact that the habitat of rare plants and animals and old village are disappear, the ancient structures are
also
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 not remain, and on the lake has a new fishing
area
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.
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, a new hotel is being built near the village to serve tourism or workers, and others do not have a different
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, area, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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