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The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period

The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six different countries over a twenty-year period
The
table
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 illustrates the amount of
waste
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production
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 in millions of
tonnes
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 in six different
countries
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 over a twenty-year period.
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, the US has the highest
waste
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production
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 of the 6
countries
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 on the
table
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,
Ireland
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 has the lowest
waste
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and
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 just one
country
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 has
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 reduction in
waste
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production
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 is Korea. In the
table
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,
Ireland
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,Poland and Portugal are three
countries
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 which have a million
tonnes
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 in
waste
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production
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, lower than 10 million and in 1990,
Ireland
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 had extremely low
waste
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so
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, so
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 it did not appear on the
table
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. In 1980 and in 2000,
Ireland
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 had 0.6 and 5
tonnes
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, Poland had 4 and 6.6
tonnes
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, Portugal had 2 and 5
tonnes
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,
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in
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 1990,
Ireland
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 had no index on the
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, Poland had 5
tonnes
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and
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 Portugal had 3
tonnes
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. The
waste
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production
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 in the US is over 100
tonnes
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,
even
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and even
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 up to 200
tonnes
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 in 2000. Korea in 1980 was like
Ireland
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,
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;
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 the quantity of
waste
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 was too low
so
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, so
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 it did not appear
and
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, and
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this
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country
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 is the only
country
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 that has reduced
waste
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 in 6
countries
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. Japan is
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country
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 which
also
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takes
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produces
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apply
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high
waste
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, 28
tonnes
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 in 1980, 32
tonnes
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 in 1990 and 53
tonnes
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, waste, production, tonnes, countries, ireland, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 5 times.
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