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The maps below show part of a village in 1910, and the same part of that village in 2010.

The maps below show part of a village in 1910, and the same part of that village in 2010.
The map illustrated the changes in the part of the village in 1910 and the same one in 2010.
Overall
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, Shelton village had seen significant changes
about
Change preposition
in
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 the facilities and layout of the village. Beginning from the middle of the
maps
Fix the agreement mistake
map
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, the middle areas had changed a lot of facilities
Linking Words
such
Punctuation problem
, such
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 as: destroyed Large
House
Use synonyms
, Baker and Grocer
instead
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 of
Cafe
Correct article usage
the Cafe
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,
Punctuation problem
;
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moreover
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, all the trees had been felled
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the small
house
Use synonyms
 was
level
Use the right word
levelled
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 up to the buildings. Houses
also
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 widen the road for the citizens. On the top right corner of the maps, post offices and houses were still there
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 more houses in the face of London road.
Furthermore
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, starting from the High
street
Fix capitalization
Street
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, in 1980 there were only 2 buildings
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 in 2010 those facilities were
further
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 enhanced by the construction of 4 more buildings, larger than the previous 2. On School Road, the school remained the same until 2010. Butcher and 1
house
Use synonyms
 were removed and replaced with a Supermarket and Parking
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 1
house
Use synonyms
 was replaced with a Bank .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words house with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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