The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, people all around the world can
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information
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easily
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the internet technology.
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it has some drawbacks, I totally
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this
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is a useful development.
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our modern world
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can be published or used by
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everywhere. From my point of view,
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provides a great equality in the society and
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a lot of opportunity for people,
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particularly
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increased sharply, which is
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result of
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access
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guidance
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make
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guranty
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guarantee
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finding
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suitable vacancy.
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shift has some
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disadvantages
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considered
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their effects. Indeed, the content of a large amount of data on the internet is not suitable for children, so
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the parents and the governments have some responsibility
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a limited
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some content would
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not
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in the
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,
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to misunderstanding.
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conducted by Toroto University, 85% of people by
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the simple
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that they have serious problems. So
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the media literature is
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thing
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technology. In conclusion, the internet provides an easilly and unlimited
access
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to information. I do believe it is a good development cause
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to an equal opportunity in
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society. It should be noted it has some drawbacks
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, but
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its advantages
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outweigh
its drawbacks.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your position with a more direct answer to the question. Make sure to correct spelling mistakes like 'agee' to 'agree'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use connecting words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to make your ideas flow better. This will help your logical structure.
task achievement
Make sure your examples are clear and relevant. For instance, explain how international students find jobs.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion that the internet is a good development.
supporting evidence
Your essay includes some good examples, such as the increase in international students.
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