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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some
population
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 have to pay
tax
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taxes
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 and they have no income to pay. A lot of society
pay
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pays
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taxes
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 to help the development of their
country
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, but
also
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, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying
taxes
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.I think paying tax is more important more but
also
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 some pure people can't pay and we can't force them. How the
taxes
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 important for the
country
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's development? It is very important because the
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taxes
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government pays
taxes
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 for the Army, workers who work in the
country
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 and a lot. Plus than that , from
taxes
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 the administration constructs new buildings , street's and more facilities for the people who live in the
country
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 . Which is out of the tax
cantreyes
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category
 will drop down .
This
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 is why
taxes
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 are important.
On the other hand
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 , some communities think they have other responsibilities
besides
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 paying
taxes
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 , and they have no money to pay to the government.
so
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 they are deprived of a lot of facilities like free medical insurance and
the
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care ,
beside
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the
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water and
the
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electricity
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, after
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after
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for
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 a long time
period
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. In my opinion, the
country
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 must have household
price
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prices
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 because not all
community
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communities
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 earn the same amount of money . And all the people must have the same facilities , and the government must have bill earnings from
elsewhere
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 and not all income from cost. In conclusion, costs are important to the
country
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 and its development . But not all of the population must pay the same amount , and
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there
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must be
exemption
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an exemption
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 for
the
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poor families . And all families must have the same accessories.

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coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs should have a clear main idea and flow smoothly from one to another. Try to use linking words such as 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to guide the reader.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more detailed examples and explanations to support your points. This will help make your ideas clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion should clearly summarize your main points. Try to rewrite them to be more specific and stronger.
task achievement
You provide the basic idea of why taxes are important and acknowledge different views on paying taxes.
task achievement
You have made an effort to express your opinion in the essay, which is a good starting point.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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