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Band 4.5

It is often argued that taxes are paid for the development of a country, while others believe that it is not necessary to pay them, people claim they have more responsibilities. This essay will discuss both perspectives before stating my own opinion that indicate a blanced both views.

It is often argued that
taxes
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 are paid for the development of a country,
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 others believe that it is not necessary to pay them
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people
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 claim they have more responsibilities. 
This
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 essay will discuss
both
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 perspectives before stating my own opinion that
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 a
blanced
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balance
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between
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the
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both
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views
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two views
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. On the one hand, many
people
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 support the idea that citizens must contribute
with
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 the development of their country by paying
taxes
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.  One main reason is that there are many facilities available for
people
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 that help improve their quality of life
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such
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 as hospitals and medicines.
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, we know that some
people
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 serve good services in return
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taxes
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.
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, governments do their best to enhance streets and lighting, so these small things will result in
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public
saftey
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safety
.
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, others argue that they have more
responsibilies
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responsibilities
 that matter more than paying
taxes
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.  They believe that they have a lack of money for the
basics
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 things that support life. 
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, children's education needs a lot of money to motivate children to go to school without feeling
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. 
Moreover
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, children need many tools to support their projects in
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different
 subjects
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 as sciences and arts. In my opinion,
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both
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 sides have valid arguments, I believe that lower
taxes
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 that help the government and individuals will be more suitable for
both
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 sides. 
This
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 is because the government alone cannot offer a better quality of life for its
people
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 without their help, especially for countries with limited resources. In conclusion,
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 there are convincing arguments on
both
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 sides, I personally believe that little
taxes
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 are better than
nothing
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no taxes
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.
ultimatley
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ultimately
,the mutual benefit will be more
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 for
both
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sided
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. This will help the reader understand your position better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more linking words (like 'firstly', 'however', 'therefore') to connect ideas. This will improve the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
Make sure to check spelling and grammar, like 'responsibilities,' 'government,' and 'ultimately.' This will help improve your score.
Task Achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument clearly. This shows good understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay structure is present with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps in making the essay easy to follow.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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