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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you return home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. -Explain the problem. -Say why the documents are important. -Suggest a solution.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my concern about
essential
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the essential
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 documents that
i have
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I
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 forgot at your hotel yesterday. I visited your Sunrise Hotel a couple of days ago for a business meeting. My Company signed a marketing deal with an overseas company
and
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, and
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 my boss handed over all documents to me. We checked out yesterday, as
i
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I
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 was on a phone call,
i
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I
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 left my paper bag in a drawer. When
i
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I
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realized
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 it, it was too late. The documents are crucial for me as it was my first dealing with a client, and
this
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 partnership is really vital to enhance the productivity of our business. If
i
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I
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 couldn't find the papers,
i
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I
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will
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would
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 be terminated.
However
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, there is
way
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a way
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 to address
this
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 issue. One of
friends
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my friends
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 is currently residing at your hotel. Could you please check my room and give
papers
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the papers
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 to him. His name is Ranveer Singh. If it doesn't work, you can
also
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Fax
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fax
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 all the papers to me. I will send you all the mandatory details. I would really appreciate
for
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apply
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your attention to
this
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 matter. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 back from you. Your's faithfully, Ash

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grammar
Make sure to use correct capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns (e.g., 'I', 'Sunrise Hotel').
coherence
Improve the flow of the letter by connecting ideas more clearly. Try using transition phrases between sentences.
coherence
Make sure to clearly structure your letter by keeping one main idea per paragraph. This will help the reader understand your points better.
task response
You clearly explained the problem about the documents.
task response
You showed the importance of the documents for your job, which adds urgency to your request.
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