The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagram shows the production of
sugar
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from
sugar
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cane in seven different steps.
Overall
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, the method consists of seven stages,
starts
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starting
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with growing the
sugar
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canes and
ends
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ending
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with harvesting in two ways (manually and mechanically). Planting and growing
sugar
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cane takes about 12 to 18 months. After a year or a year and a half
later
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apply
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, it is ready to be harvested. There are two harvesting techniques. One involves a worker manually chopping down the crops
while
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the other uses a machine to easily reap the crops without much effort. After the reaping,
sugar
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canes are crushed by using another machine to extract liquid from the
sugar
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cane. In the next step,
extracted
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the extracted
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juice is purified through
limestone
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a limestone
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filter. After the purification, the liquid is poured into an evaporator and heated to become a syrup. To separate small
sugar
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crystal
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crystals
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from the syrup,
previously
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the previously
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heated syrup is placed in a centrifuge. After centrifugation,
finally
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, the
sugar
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is
poured
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finally poured
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into a big container to cool down and dry before it is ready to be used.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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