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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people believe that all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. Do you agree or disagree?

There is an argument that
parents
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be taken
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take
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 a course which able them to be good
parents
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. I have a balanced view
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of
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this
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 idea
and
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 the reasons will be thoroughly explained as follows.
To begin
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 with, many people
have
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already
knew
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know
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 how should take care of their children, so these
courses
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 are not essential to
whom
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them
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.
For instance
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, some people come from a large family with younger siblings, which means that
,
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 they had a lot of
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to look after them.
Moreover
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,
by
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with
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 growing technology and social
media
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media,
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 people can easily access
to
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apply
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a
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apply
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various forms of
informations
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information
 which are recommended by
prefossionals
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professionals
 like
,
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apply
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 doctors or
psychologist
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psychologists
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.
Thus
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, just participating
to
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in
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 these
courses
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 is not
only
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the only
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 way of being good
parents
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.
However
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, there
are
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is
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 some important content that
play
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plays
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 a crucial role in
children
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children's
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lifes
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lives
. Indeed, subjects which are
relaited
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related
 to healthy issues, like first
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aid
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aids
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aids,
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 should be considered in
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the curruculum
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curruculum
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curriculum
 of these
courses
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.
According to
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study
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a study
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 conducted at USA Health
Internationl
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International
,
by
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apply
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just providing one hour of safety instruction
courses
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 about
kid's
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kids'
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 fewer a significant reduction
on
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in
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 "Tasanoje" in
brain
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the brain
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, as
result
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a result
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 of
higher
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fewer,has been shown.
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therefore
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, some vital and essential subjects, particularly health and safety roles, should be
tough
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taught
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 to
parents
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. In conclusion,
although
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 there is an argument that taking a course is
neccessary
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necessary
 for
bing
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being
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 a good
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parents
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parent
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, I do believe that the content and target
skill
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skills
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 of
this
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 course
is
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are
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 important,
that
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and that
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 teaching health and safety subjects
are
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is
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 highly recommended.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction presents a clear opinion on the topic. This helps the reader understand your position.
coherence cohesion
Try to use clearer linking words between sentences and paragraphs. This helps your ideas flow better and improves readability.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or studies to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and makes your essay more convincing.
task achievement
You provided a good balance of viewpoints which shows you understand both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main point, which ties back to your introduction.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandatory
  • crucial skills
  • personal growth
  • parenting styles
  • autonomy
  • financial and logistical barriers
  • implement
  • undermine
  • experience
  • cultural differences
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