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The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002.

The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002.
The tables show the average working
hours
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 for full-time and part-time workers in Greece,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and the
UK
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 in 2002. It
also
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 compares these figures with the European average
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,
men
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 worked longer than
women
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 in full-time jobs. For part-time workers,
women
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 worked more
hours
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 than
men
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. Greece had the highest number of working
hours
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 for full-time workers,
while
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 the
UK
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 had the lowest for
women
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. In Greece,
women
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 worked 39.9
hours
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 and
men
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 worked 42.5
hours
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 full-time. In the Netherlands, full-time working
womens
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women
 worked 38
hours
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 and
men
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 worked the same. In the
UK
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,
women
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 worked 37
hours
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 and
men
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 37.5
hours
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 full-time. The European average was 39.2 for
women
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 and 40.4 for
men
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. In part-time jobs, the average
hours
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 were lower. Greek
women
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 worke29.3
hours
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 and
men
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 worked 30
hours
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. Netherlands
women
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 worked 29.2 and
men
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 28.3.
UK
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women
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 worked 28
hours
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 and
men
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 29
hours
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. The European average for part-time was 34
hours
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 for
women
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 and 32 for
men
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, which is higher than in these three countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, uk, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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