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Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by they clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opiniom. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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this
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 have started focusing more on looks than
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 inner personality or behaviour. It has been argued by some
people
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 that
clothes
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 define the personality of a
person
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,
whereas
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 others believe that attire should not be used as a medium to dictate a
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's nature.
This
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 in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, it is believed that first impression is the
last
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 impression;
this
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 signifies that how you look and how you behave with the other
person
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 for the first time, your behaviour or what kind of
person
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 you are will be judged on that basis.
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, first impression plays a crucial role in events like interviews, meetings, etc.
For instance
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, I had an interview
last
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 year with the company I am currently working for
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 I dressed up formally for my interview
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, wearing
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 a white shirt and black pants and formal shoes, but
on the other hand
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, another candidate came in informal
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wearing
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 ripped jeans and a crop top. We both gave the interview, but I got selected even though the other
person
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 was more qualified than I.
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, if the
clothes
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 you wear are tidy and ironed properly, it means that the
person
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 has management skills, and they keep things organised;
on the contrary
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, individuals with untidy
clothes
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 seem to be less organised and lack cleanliness. On the flip side,
clothes
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 should not be used as a basis to judge human beings. One doesn't know from the
clothes
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whether
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 the
person
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 has good or bad intentions. One
such
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 example is that these days most criminals or black market
people
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 wear pant coat and they are well-dressed, but the activities they do are illegal , like smuggling drugs, etc.
Additionally
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, poor
people
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 cannot afford branded
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 , but
this
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 does not signify that they are bad
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. Human beings should be valued on the basis of their work, behaviour and nature. More importantly, the discrimination in terms of materialistic things needs to be stopped in order to promote equality and the well-being of the community and nation.
To conclude
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, it can be inferred from the above confabulation that
although
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clothes
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 play an important role in determining
the
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person
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's looks, the significance of inner personality and nature cannot be overlooked.
Consequently
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,
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 should not be used as a mere factor to judge anyone
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 one should give the other
person
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 a chance based on their skills and capability.

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Make sure your ideas are clear and easy to understand. Try to explain them in a simple way.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better. This helps readers follow your thoughts more easily.
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The essay shows a clear understanding of both sides of the argument.
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You have provided a personal example, which makes your opinion stronger.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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