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You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letter: • Explain why you are interested in helping • Give details suitable past experience • Suggest ways you might help with the event

Dear organisers, My name is
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Khaja Pasha
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, I am a local student here in Oakville. I recently saw your advertisement about your charity
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and
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 you will be needing volunteers for the
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. I would like to express my interest in
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event
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 success. I am studying for social services, and that's why I am very much interested
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in being
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 part of your
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. I have previously worked in many charitable institutions
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such
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apply
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helping hands
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Helping Hands
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,
being human
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Being Human
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 and Red
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. I have
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 arranged many events on my own at a small
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 medium range. I strongly believe that my experience will definitely help me
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this
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event
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 done successfully. You can reach out to me on my number 64517373997. Thank you Yours sincerely Khaja

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain your interest in the event in the first paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use connecting words to help the flow of your ideas between paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear introduction and conclusion to improve the structure of your letter.
content
You clearly mentioned your past experience with charitable institutions.
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Your contact information is provided, which is useful for the organisers.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer
  • charity event
  • personal connection
  • experience
  • skills
  • promote
  • logistics
  • contribute
  • teamwork
  • organizing events
  • booths
  • community involvement
  • resonate
  • support
  • application
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