The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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specified in the bar charts illustrate the proportion of educated individuals who prefer to work part-time in leisure
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throughout the year 2008. At first glance, it is evident that a large number of
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people
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had the highest figure to pass the
further
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study, as
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trend has been the same for postgraduates. Another interesting point is that the
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volunteer
work had the lowest portion of participation for both mentioned degrees. With regard to the graduate students, as can be
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there has been a
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trend among different types of tasks.
To begin
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with, the part-time working had
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attracted just over 17000
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graduates
,
while
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this
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number
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unemployed people was lower
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16000.
In addition
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,
further
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studies
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apply
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had the most number of graduated participants
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apply
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,
more
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approximately more
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than 26000, compared with
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volunteer
ones. Turning to the
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postgraduate
learners, it is crystal clear that there has been a slight decrease between those who have a part-time job to jobless individuals from 2535-1625.
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, there has been a sharp upward trend between voluntary job seekers and those who are willing to have
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study.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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