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Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times .What are the advantages for a company having a uniform?Are there any benefits of having a uiform for the staff.

In recent years, some companies started to unify their employees clothes, on one hand some analytics believe that it create a harmony between people who are working in the same section, and
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 some believe that it make a united identify and it's become more easily to identify their employees, anyways i will discuss both points and explain them in detail. The first point, was about how it's create a harmony and comfortable feeling, but why is
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 happen, because of how we are communicate with others,
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 after you see a person who are wearing a similar clothes with you, that you will made you feel some kind of concord and peace, and speaking with that person will be more easier, and that
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 having similar things to share. The second point, is to facilitate the process of identifying the workers of the company, maybe some individuals will see
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 as a pointless things, but
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 it's has a great benefits,
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, to boost brand awareness , and to raise the visibility of the company, that will make the firm well-known and increase their wealth. In
nutshell
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, unified
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firm clothes can be a great help to raise
it's
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 territory and money, and it boosts their performance and productivity
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 it creates a well-known identity
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 the
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company
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 firms like
mcdonalds
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McDonald's
, and their uniform, even sometimes people use it as a meme and joke.

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You have good ideas about the benefits of uniforms.
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Your essay explains both sides of the argument well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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