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the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in full asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 20 cody summarize information by selecting and deporting the main features an make competitions were relavant.

the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in full asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 20 cody summarize information by selecting and deporting the main features an make competitions were relavant.
The line graph illustrates the
population
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 living in urban areas of Asian countries
such
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 as the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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 from 1970 to
2020
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2020,
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along with
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 projections for 2030 and 2040. The data is presented in percentages.
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, the
population
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 has an upward trend over the years in various cities, and the report shows it will rise in upcoming years too
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while
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, while
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,
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apply
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 there were some variations observed during the mentioned period. Noticeably, the highest
population
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 in 1970
reported
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was reported
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 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 at just over 30
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percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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population
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which
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, which
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 went up
in
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to
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 1990 around 50
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percent
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per cent
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 and
after
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apply
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that
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then
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 slightly decreased in 2000.
Similarly
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,
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the Indonesia
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Indonesia
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Indonesian
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population
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 expanded throughout the mentioned time.
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, Malaysia had exactly 30
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percent
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per cent
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 of
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population
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the population
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which
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, which
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 rose constantly and reached a peak of more than 80
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percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
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,
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population
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the population
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 in a city in Thailand climbed near 10
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percent
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per cent
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in
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between
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 1990 from 1970 and
stayed around
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remained
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 stable till 2020 and
then
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multiplied
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increased
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percent with synonyms.
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