You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Give details of your study plan Explain why you want to get a part time job Suggest how your frined could help you find a job.

Dear Amrit, How are you? I hope you've been well. You will be over the moon after reading

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letter because I am coming to Canada to finish my

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studies. As you already know, I have been planning to complete my

masters

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in Nutrition and Science from

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the Univeristy

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Univeristy

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University

of Toronto, but

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year my visa got refused. Luckily, I got accepted

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time. In order to maintain my expenses, at least rent and grocery bill, I was thinking that I should get a part-time job once I

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there. You are well aware of my family's financial condition

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they will not be able to assist me with these expenses.

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, I don't want to become a burden on them as they have already done enough for me.

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, it will give me a sense of being independent. I was thinking you

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be able to help me

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apply

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find a job because you are currently living there, and know more about the place than I do.

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, you

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working at

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for a year now, so you already know how to build a resume and land a job. Let me know when you have

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apply

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we can discuss

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. I can't wait to see you. Your friend, Simran

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure each paragraph has only one main idea to improve clarity.

task achievement

Add a little more detail about why you want the job, such as your plans or dreams for the future.

greeting and closing

You wrote a friendly greeting and closing, which makes the letter feel warm and personal.

complete response

You clearly explained your study plan and the need for a part-time job, which shows good understanding of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

213 words

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