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Increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this.

In recent years, the trend of getting higher
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 has increased significantly
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 many students are going to universities and colleges for better education. Some advocate
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 trend, others remain sceptical, citing some possible drawbacks. In
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 essay, I shall elaborate on both perspectives and their
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 impact on individuals and society. To commence with, there are a myriad of benefits associated with
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. The cardinal one is that going to university helps students to gain in-depth knowledge about various aspects of the chosen field, which leads to better employment opportunities and wealthier jobs in the future.
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, not only can learners learn important skills, but
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 develop critical thinking and teamwork, which are valuable in the workplace.
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, despite some aforementioned merits, there are
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 some negative outcomes which cannot be overlooked.
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, taking higher education is not budget-friendly
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, many students cannot afford it.
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, some learners may not find a job in their field after graduation, which can lead to frustration and
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 of time.
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 higher education opens the doors for better job options and more knowledge, but
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 too expensive and hard to pay
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, the merits of the discussed matter far exceed its demerits.

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task achievement
Use clear examples to support your points. For example, mention specific jobs or fields where university education is helpful.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to link your ideas clearly. Use words like 'firstly', 'secondly' and 'in conclusion' to structure your essay better.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, avoid using 'but'. Instead, say 'however' or 'even though'.
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You present both advantages and disadvantages clearly.
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Your introduction gives a good overview of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • job opportunities
  • critical thinking
  • teamwork
  • expensive
  • debt
  • frustration
  • wasted time
  • experience
  • pressure
  • stress
  • burnout
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