IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letter: • Explain why you are interested in helping • Give details suitable past experience • Suggest ways you might help with the event

Dear Sir, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in the best of your spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter with respect to the advertisement published by you in the newspaper that you are looking for volunteers to run a charity event. I am delighted to tell you that I am interested in working with you, because at present I am on summer
vacations
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vacation
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. I was
also
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 looking for some activity
,
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apply
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 which could enable me to serve
the
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apply
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society. I
like
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would like
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 to tell you that previously I have worked with Khalsa Aid. It is
a
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an
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 NGO, which runs charity work during disasters like floods, earthquakes
etc
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, etc
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. I have been working with them for the
last
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 two years. As I have told you, I have prior experience
of
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with
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these
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this
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 kind of
events
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event
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.
Last
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 year, I worked with the food distribution team, and I was responsible for packing and
distribution
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distributing
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of
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apply
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food packets. I hope you will give me an opportunity to work with you. I am looking forward to hearing from you on
this
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. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one clear main idea.
task achievement
Add more details about how you will help at the event.
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Use a warmer closing, like 'Best regards' for a friendly tone.
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Your past experience is relevant and adds value to your application.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is polite and well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer
  • charity event
  • personal connection
  • experience
  • skills
  • promote
  • logistics
  • contribute
  • teamwork
  • organizing events
  • booths
  • community involvement
  • resonate
  • support
  • application
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