Some people think that it's necessary to teach foreign language for children at young ages. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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is like not speaking at all.
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, learning a new
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is a must
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an option
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there is no
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the fact that kids should be taught a second
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early
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,
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some people see
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as
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skill and they should spend more time doing amusing activities. In
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I will
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discuss
both views and share my own opinion. On one side of the debate, I strongly believe that it would be much easier to
aquire
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acquire
a second
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as a child than as an adult.
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Children
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have more capability than we think
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, and
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the resources
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learning new
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language
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languages
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are widespread.
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: my
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niece
spends hours watching entertainment videos on social media in a different
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, which
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makes her
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the
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unintenedly
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unintentionally
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Subsequently
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she may have the option to learn a third
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in her later life. On the other side,
practicing
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practising
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a new
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for children may cause difficulties using their mother tounge
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in daily life,
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: they may suffer in
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communication
with their friends in school or playgrounds,
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therefore
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this
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miscommunication may
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to self-esteem and demotivate them to learn a new
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for a long time. By
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way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that
childern
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children
must attain a new
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before growing up, as
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will help them
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acquire
the
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and certainly will help to shape their personalities and
intellegence
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intelligence
,
as well as
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a trump card for them in their career life.

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