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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar chart below illustrates the ranking of ten
countries
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 for
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electricity
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generation
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 and
consumption
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 in 2014.
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, the value of
electricity
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generation
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 is higher than
electricity
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generation
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 in all
countries
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.
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, both
of
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the production and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in
China
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 and
United
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State
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States
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 are much higher than the other
countries
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. The ranking of
countries
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 in terms of
electricity
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generation
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, the top three
countries
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 are
China
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,
United
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State
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 and Russia,
which
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 values are 5398
billion
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kWh
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, 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and 1057
billion
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kWh
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, respectively.
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, other
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countries's
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electric
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electricity
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are
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 lower than one thousand
billion
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kWh
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, especially, the
electric
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electricity
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generation
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 in Korea is only 485.1
billion
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kWh
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, which is almost one-eleventh of
China
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. The ranking of
countries
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 in terms of
electricity
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generation
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 is the same as that of
electricity
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consumption
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, and the only difference is the specific
consumption
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 values. Among them, Korea has the lowest
electricity
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consumption
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, at 449.5 units,
while
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China
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 has the highest, reaching 5322 units.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, generation, consumption, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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