The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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highest
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ten
countries
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the
consumption
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and
production
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of in 2014. China consumed the highest
electricity
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in these
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ten
countries
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, followed by
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of
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the USA. The other eight
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countries
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countries'
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consumption
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were
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much lower than the two
counties
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countries
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. At the same time, the
Korea
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Korean
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,
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Rep
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Republic
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production
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and
consumpton
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consumption
was the lowest in the ten
countries
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. In 2014,
China
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China's
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production
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of
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electricity
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ranked
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first(5398), followed by that of the USA(4099). The other
country
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country's
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productions
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production
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of
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electricity
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were
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much lower than the two
countries
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. Russia ,Japan, and India
prductions
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productions
were in the interval from 1057 to 871. The productions of the other
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fluctuated between 618.9 and 485.1. The
consumption
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of these
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had
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similar ranks
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the
production
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electricity
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in the
countris
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countries
.
China
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China's
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consumption
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of
electricity
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(5322)was higher than that of the USA (3866). The
consumption
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Russia (1057) was higher than that of India , which was lower than that of Japan. The Germany (582.5) of the
electricity
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consumption
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was higher than that of Canada(499.9), which was higher than that of the other
countries
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.

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Linking words: Add linking words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, consumption, production, electricity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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