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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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 bar chart presents the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in the top ten countries in 2014.
Overall
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, China and the United States were the dominant countries in both
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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, with their figures far exceeding those of the other nations. In detail, China had the highest
electricity
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production
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 at 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 and the highest
consumption
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 at 5,322
billion
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kWh
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. The United States followed, with
production
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 at 4,099
billion
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kWh
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 and
consumption
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 at 3,866
billion
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kWh
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. Russia ranked
third,
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with
production
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 (1,067
billion
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kWh
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) slightly higher than
consumption
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 (1,038
billion
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kWh
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). Japan’s
production
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 was 936.2
billion
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kWh
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, and its
consumption
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 was 856.7
billion
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kWh
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. India’s
production
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 stood at 871
billion
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kWh
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,
while
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 its
consumption
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 was 698.8
billion
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kWh
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.Most countries showed a higher
electricity
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production
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 than
consumption
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,
while
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 a few had slightly lower
production
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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