The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar chart compares the variations in terms of the production and the
consumption
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of
electricity
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in
top
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ten nations in the year of 2014.
Overall
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, producing
electricity
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stood out
a
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more leading category than consuming
electricity
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in nine countries except Germany. Notably, China accounted for the highest proportion significantly,
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in Korea, the production and
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consumption
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of
electricity
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were minimal. In terms of China, the
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of
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electricity
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generation and
consumption
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were similar, both around 5300
billion
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kWh
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.
Subsequently
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, the US was ranked
first,
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which generated
electricity
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with 4099
billion
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kWh
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slightly
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higher than
consumption
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(3866
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kWh
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). The two figures of
electricity
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in Russia were close, both with roughly 1000
billion
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kWh
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.
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, Korea constituted the smallest share of
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generation and
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, at 485.1
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kWh
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and 449.5
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kWh
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. With regard to
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six countries, the sum of
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proportions above
equaled
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to
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in China.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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