The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar chart illustrated the top ten countries for
the
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electricity
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producing
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and
comsuming
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consumption
in 2014. It is obvious that China,
United
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States and Russia ranked the top three in terms of both
electricity
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production
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and consumption.
While
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Brazil,
Gemany
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Germany
and
Korea
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South Korea
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, Rep were the
last
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three countries
for producing
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to produce
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and
using
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the
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electriciy
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electricity
. China was the
countrie
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country
producing and using the
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electricity most
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most electricity
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at 5398
billion
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kWh
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and 5322
billion
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kWh
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, respectively,
following
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with
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United
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States at 4099
billion
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kWh
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on
production
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and 3866
billion
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kWh
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on
consuption
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consumption
. Despite Russia ranking
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third,
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the quantities of
electricity
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production
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(1057
billion
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kWh
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) and
consumpsion
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consumption
(1038
billion
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kWh
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) were far lower than China and
US
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the US
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,
closing
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to those of Japan at 936.2
billion
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kWh
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production
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and 856.7
billion
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kWh
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consumption.
On the other hand
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, Korea, Rep produced the least amount of
electricity
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at 485.1
billion
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kWh
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and the least consumption at 449.5
billion
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kWh
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, similar to Germany (526.6
billion
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kWh
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production
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and 582.5
billion
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kWh
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).
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consumption).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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