The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar chart illustrated a breakdown of the
production
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and
consumption
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of
electricity
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in the top ten countries in 2014.
Overall
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, China recorded the highest figure
of
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the
production
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and
consumption
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of
electricity
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.
By contrast
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, the lowest figure was observed in Korea.
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Germany was the only country
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where
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the
consumption
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of
electricity
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was higher than
production
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. In terms of higher
consumption
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of
electricity
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, the figure
of
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China was more than twice that of Russia, reaching 5322
billion
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kWh
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compared to 1038
billion
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kWh
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. Meanwhile, the United States was the second largest
electricity
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producer and consumer, at 4099
billion
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kWh
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and 3866
billion
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kWh
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. In
details
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, the
production
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of
electricity
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was nearly one hundred more than
consumption
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in India, Canada,
France
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and France
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. Their figures of
production
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ranged from 871
billion
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kWh
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to 530.7
billion
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kWh
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and
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consumption
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ranged from 698.8
billion
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kWh
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to 462.9
billion
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kWh
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.
Whereas
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, Japan and Brazil had
similar
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a similar
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pattern in the
defference
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difference
of producing and consuming
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, which
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was around 80
billion
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kWh
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, at 936.2 and 530.7
billion
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kWh
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electricy
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electricity
production
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and at 856.7 and 455.8
billion
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kWh
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consumption
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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