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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar graph shows the top ten countries for the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in 2014. China ranked
frist
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first
 with 5398 billion kWh, significantly ahead of the United States in
secound
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second
 place. The next group is Russia, Japan and India,
ranged
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 from 1057 to 871.
Ulitimately
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Ultimately
, Korea be bottom of the list,
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standing
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 at 485.1. There is little difference
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Production
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between Production
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 and
Consumption
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 in terms of
this
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 chart. Apart from a few cases,
electricity
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production
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 was higher than
consumption
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.
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 pattern was particularly
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marked in
US
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the US
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, where
production
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 outpaced
consumption
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 by 233 billion kWh. With the sole exception of Germany, where
consumption
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 marginally exceeded
production
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.
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,
it is clear that
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 China and the United States were the leading producers and consumers of
electricity
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. Considerably higher than the figures for all other nations. Most countries generated more
electricity
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 than they consumed, with the sole exception of Germany, where
consumption
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 was slightly higher.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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