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Many people today think that homework is still an important part of school while others think that it is becoming outdated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 is no denying the fact that many people today think
homework
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 is still an important part of
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 others argue that it is becoming outdated
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 is a commonly held belief that
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whereas
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 others argue that it is bast method
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 an argument that opposes it.
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 my opinion ,
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 consider that
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homework
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 can be beneficial in some cases ,
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it may limit
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students'
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 ability to
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 critically and be creative.
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 begin
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 some people support
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as a result
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 learners review what they learned at school .
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 other words, daily tasks for
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pupils
 are assisting to refine academic and educational levels
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 through hard work and a genuine passion for learning .
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 addition, repeat duties daily to individuals in education aid
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to reinforce
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 knowledge and improve
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 memory.
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for
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 example, when students complete math exercises at home, they can practice solving problems without pressure.
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 develops their academic performance and builds responsibility .
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 point to consider, some humans
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 that schoolwork
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causes stress and
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reduces
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 the reality is quite the opposite, in
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 these are the most effective methods we have become accustomed to.
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, it grows and promotes
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 writing skills.
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 possible to say that young learners
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schooling
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do not know how to write
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assignment
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,
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capability
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 advance over time
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 handwriting and spelling
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 not
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 learns the same way
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for
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 instance, thinking differs
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based
 on age and mindset.
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 conclusion,
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despite
 people having different views,
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 believe that instruction and practice are useful in all forms.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states both views and your opinion. It should be clear and easy to understand. Make sure to avoid repeated phrases.
Coherence & Cohesion
Structure your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to improve flow and clarity.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your points effectively. This will strengthen your argument and provide clarity.
Task Achievement
Check your spelling and grammar. Some mistakes may confuse the reader and affect the overall quality of your essay.
Task Achievement
Your essay covers both views on homework, showing understanding of different opinions.
Task Achievement
You made some good points about the benefits of homework for students' learning and skills development.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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