You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:  describe the situation  explain your problems and why it is difficult to work  say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Ms. Moeyaert, I am writing to let you know about my current living
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with my roommate.
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of the
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my previous roommate left after completing her graduation, and
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new student came to share the
room
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with me. Recently, I
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having
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time sharing
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accommodation
with her. Let me explain my
situation
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. She is a
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college student and likes to party a lot. Every other day, she
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her boyfriend over in the shared
room
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, and
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makes me uncomfortable. If
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is once in a
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while
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situation
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it would be understandable; but most of the time they hang out in the
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, and play incessantly loud music.
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makes the
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even worse because I am in my
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year of graduation, and I have to do
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of assignments
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in
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kind of environment, I am unable to concentrate. Would you kindly allot me a different
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so that I can focus on my studies
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I don't have any issue specifications or conditions
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it's just that the place needs to be quiet and tidy. Please get back to me as soon as possible because my exams are starting next month, and I really need to study to get good grades. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Simranpreet Kaur

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coherence
Try to use clearer paragraphs to separate ideas. Start with a short introduction, then describe the problems, and finish with your request.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear message and goes directly to the point about your problem.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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