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Writing Samples
Band 4

individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

the
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 debate of
this
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 concept
that
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peoples
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people
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 can do nothing to
enhace
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enhance
 the surroundings
but
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, but
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 the
govenment
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government
 and huge
organizations
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organisations
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 can do things to improve.
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whereas i
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 completely agree with
this
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 idea
and
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, and
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 in
this
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essay
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i
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I
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 will support my opinion with examples.
To begin
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, there are several things that management of the society
take
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 care
for
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 the
envirnment
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environment
like
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, like
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 removing the garbage on the streets.
so
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So
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, the
peoples
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people
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 of the society can not be
take
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taken
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 care of
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in this
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this
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these
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 untidy circumstances.
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for
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example
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example,
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 most of the people in every street in the cities and crowded places
threw
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throw
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the
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apply
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various
kind
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kinds
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 of
garbages
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garbage
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 that
has
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have
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 been
smelled
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 for a long time.
As a result
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,
its
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spread
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spreads
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 the germs and diseases that can influence the
culture
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 health.
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in
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addition
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 it leads to dague and bacterial infections.
On the other hand
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 , the
scond
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second
 main reason that
administration
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the administration
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have
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has
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give
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given
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 the authority to workers.they should
be taking
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take
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 care of the traffic rules
aand
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and
 maintain the
scheduale
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schedule
 of the traffic lights to prevent
the
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apply
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accidents.
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for
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instance
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instance,
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 there are a lot of commuters
that
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who
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 break the rules, and those who
ahave
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have
rushes
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 the vehicle in
a
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an
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unethicle
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unethical
 way
its
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apply
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increase the
deaths
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death
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 rates. In
contast
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contrast
, there are many
peopples
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people
 who
have
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are
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 careless
,
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apply
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and totally dependent on
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the organization
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organization
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organisation
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.
it
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It
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 leads to
society
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a society
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 with low
economically
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economic growth,
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 and
there
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their
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 culture still be stopped as
careless
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stagnant
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 for
long
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a long
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 time.
To conclude
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 that every person should support the government.
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Secondly
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secondly
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secondly,
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 to do things to make better
atmosphete
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apply
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.ultimately,
i
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I
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beleive
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believe
 that
government
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the government
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 take the duty with
responsibilty
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responsibility
.

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task achievement
Improve the clarity of your main points and ensure they are directly related to the question.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to improve structure.
coherence and cohesion
Correct spelling and grammar errors to enhance readability.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear opinion on the topic, showing your agreement with the statement.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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