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Band 2.5

Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
recnt
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recent
 years, unhealthy
food
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 has become an
indispensible
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indispensable
 part of
individuals
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individuals'
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life
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lives
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.
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 it
os
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is
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covenient
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convenient
 and saves time,
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also
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it also
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have
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has
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a deterimental
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deterimental
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detrimental
 impact on someone's life. I strongly agree with the statement as it
effects
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 in
ample
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many
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 ways on our
lifestlye
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lifestyle
. To commence with, there are a myriad of
health
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 implications
are
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associated with
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 trend. The cardinal one is that it
often
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 high in unhealthy fats, sugar and sodium, which can lead to serious
health
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 problems
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 as obesity, diabetes, and heart
diseases
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 when consumed on
the
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a
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 regular basis. An even more significant fact is nutritional deficiency. To make it clear, a diet heavy in fast
food
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 can lack essential nutrients, vitamins, and
minrals
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minerals
 necessary for maintaining good
health
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
for instance
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, a 2022 global
health
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 survey conducted by
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the world
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world
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World Health
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health
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organization
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Organisation
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 (WHO) over 60% of adults who
regurarly
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regularly
 consumed fast
food
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 at
leat
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least
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 three times a week reported issues
such
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 as weight gain, low energy levels, and poor digestion.
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 to
it
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, these findings directly link with the increased fast
food
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 intake and decline in healthy outcomes.
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 but not least,
environmental
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the environmental
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 impact of

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language
Make sure you proofread your essay to correct spelling mistakes and typos before submitting it. Words such as 'recent' and 'detrimental' are important to spell correctly.
structure
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that introduces the main idea you will discuss.
content
Support your ideas with more specific examples, and ensure the connection between different ideas is clear to the reader.
content
You have a clear opinion and you state that you strongly agree with the statement.
content
You provide some health implications and important statistics, which show that you have made an effort to understand the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart diseases
  • nutritional deficiency
  • malnutrition
  • convenience
  • nutritional value
  • busy lifestyles
  • balanced meals
  • economic impact
  • lower-income groups
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural heritage
  • culinary diversity
  • mass production
  • environmental degradation
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