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Now a days modern modes of transport are available; still some people believe that a bicycle is the best way to get from one place to another. Do you agree or disagree?

The scientists created modern modes of transport to improve travel methods. In recent times , modern modes of transportation are available,
while
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 some
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 still think that the bicycle is the best
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 to reach different destinations. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss whether
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 are the best
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 to move around or if improved vehicles are suitable. In my opinion, there are many different ways to get from one place to another, but some
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 choose
bicycles
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instead
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 of more options of vehicles.
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bicycles
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 are affordable and easy to ride.
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, most
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 who
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bicycles
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 are kids, teenagers and deliverymen. The roads are prepared for driving a bicycle, and are easy to
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 for kids to go to their school. For more safety, they can
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 a helmet.
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,
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 are not suitable for travelling or going somewhere far away, It is suitable for short trips. So there are many options to move around
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 Cars, Buses, aeroplanes and trains, and the best
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 to get from one destination to another for most
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 is
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. Most
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 cars are adults, because the driver's license requirements include being over 18, and it has safety requirements. In conclusion, each person can choose what is the most effective
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 to transport for their purpose to get around

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion. Make it more specific about whether you agree or disagree with the statement.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer links between your ideas in paragraphs. For example, use words like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'finally' to help the reader follow your argument better.
task achievement
Provide more examples to support your points. For instance, when you mention that bicycles are good for short trips, give reasons why they are better than cars for those trips.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about the topic and you state it in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You present both sides of the argument, discussing both bicycles and cars, which shows a balanced view.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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