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Some people think that the government should spend money exploring life on other plantes, while others believe it is a waste of public money when there are so many problemss on Earth. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The government is spending a lot of
money
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 exploring life on other
planetes
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planets
,
while
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 there are so many
problems
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 on
Earth
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.
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this
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 essay agrees with
this
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 statement. because
,
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 searching for another life on
planets
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 wastes a huge amount of
money
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while
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 we have
a
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problems
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 on
Earth
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 like
climate
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change
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. On the one hand, exploring
lifes
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life
 on
planets
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 is
usefull
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useful
 and it will increase the development of the WORLD,
disbite
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despite
 that it's a waste of time and
money
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, companies like NASA and governments spend a
major
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significant
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number
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amount
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 of
money
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during
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exploring
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exploration
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,
for
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example
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 a space rocket
cost
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costs
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a
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Billions and it might fall during
it's lunch
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its launch
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.
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for
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 instance, NASA made a lot of space
rocket
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rockets
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 and 70% of them didn't go
well
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 or not as
what
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they thought.
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,
government
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the government
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 should focus on searching for
a
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sulotions
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solutions
 for
Earth
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's
problems
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, like
climate
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change
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, because if they
forgot
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 it and
attembted
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attempt
 to
exploring
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explore
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 other
planets
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, it might get worse, and
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cause several
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several
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severe
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climate
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changing
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.
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for
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example
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 fires in LA
is
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are
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 happening almost every year and
also
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 in Florida, and if they
found
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find
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 a
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solution
sulotion
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 it will be a good step to
elemenates
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eliminate
climate
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change
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. In conclusion,
The
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 government is funding a lot of
money
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 exploring life on other
planetes
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planets
while
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 there are so many
problems
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 on
Earth
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.
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for
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For
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example
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example,
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climate
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change
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, and searching for
lifes
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life
 on other
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planets
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planets,
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 it's a waste of time and
money
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.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly present both views and your opinion. Try to rephrase the question in your own words.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your ideas connect well with each other. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'furthermore', and 'in addition' to help the flow.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your points, but make sure they are clear and relevant to your argument. Avoid vague statements and try to develop your ideas more.
task achievement
You show a clear opinion throughout the essay, which is a great strength.
task achievement
You identify important issues like climate change, which is relevant to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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