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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005.

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005.
The table presents the percentage of electricity generated from four different sources in five Asian
countries
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 in 2005.
Overall
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, these
countries
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 demonstrated varying patterns of fuel usage.
Additionally
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, petroleum was the least commonly used
sources
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 in most
countries
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, with the exception of
Thailand
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. In terms of coal and lignite,
this
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 source made up the majority of electricity generation in Malaysia(61%) and Singapore(42%),
while
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 its usage was below 10% in the remaining
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. Meanwhile, nuclear power was used by almost all
countries
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 except
Thailand
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, with Japan relying on it most heavily at 49%.
Although
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 petroleum products accounted for the second largest proportion in
Thailand
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 (36%), they represented the smallest share in the other nations (at 2% in Malaysia and 3%
elsewhere
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).
On the other hand
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, hydro and wind power contributed 48% in South Korea, making it the dominant source there.
This
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 was followed by
Thailand
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 (19%),
whereas
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 the other three
countries
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 recorded less than 5%.
Lastly
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, the "other" fuel category was the largest proportion in
Thailand
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 (42%), trailed by Singapore and Japan, each at 39%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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