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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the key information related to the
number
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 of
crimes
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 in
UK
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the UK
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with
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, with
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related
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data related
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 to different ages provided in tens of thousands. The pie chart depicts the types of
crimes
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 in
UK
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the UK
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occurred
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that occurred
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 in the
last
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year
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year,
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 given as a percentage.
Overall
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, the majority of the people who have
involved
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been involved
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 in
crimes
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 were
in age
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aged
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of
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apply
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20. In terms of
type of the
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the type of
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 crime, the most substantial variety of crime
happened
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that occurred
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 was
,
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apply
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 violent crime.
In contrast
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,
crimes
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 were done by the kids who were between the age of 8 to 12 as a gradual climb in
number
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 of
crimes
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 can be observed, from 0 to approximately 5,
then
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 followed up by a drastic increase and peaked at 80 000 as most noticeably of all it highlights that the graetest
number
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 of killers who were 20 years old.
However
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, there's a sharp decrease to about
20 000
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20,000
,
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;
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further more
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furthermore
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, the
number
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 of criminals slightly
decrease
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decreases
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and
plateus
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plateaus
.
On the other hand
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, the pie chart
contrasts
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shows
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 that violent criminals were considerably high
which
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, which
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 was almost
a
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apply
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half and property and drug
crimes
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proportions
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apply
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were
similar
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similar,
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whereas
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,
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apply
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 the least proportion
has
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was
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 engaged in
crimals
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crimes
 related to public
orders
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order
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, which was nearly a one-tenth.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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