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Writing Samples
Band 3

There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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technology
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 a real
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difference
 in
people
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's quality of
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 in our lifetime.
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Personally
, I
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strongly
 agree with
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 the following paragraphs. One of the first reasons,
internet
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 is the primary and most important factor that has led to
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people
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people's
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 daily
life
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lives
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. All the electronic or
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governmental
 services and data
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infrastructure
 are included on the
internet
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.
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, Saudi
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 can
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access
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 website to take
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an appointment
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 , request their national information , and renew their identity card or passports without going to the
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government
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.
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,
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people
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qulity
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quality
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lives
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have
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 improved and become better compared to previous years with
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 of the
internet
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. On the other
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hand
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, the
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 of artificial
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intelligence
 programs
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 changer
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, espcially
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espcially
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especially
 in
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the business
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 world. AI
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 as Chat GPT or Deepseek have
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everthing
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everything
 that we know about
artifial intelligenc
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artificial intelligence
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, in Chat GPT model can be used in all
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aspects
 of life
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 data
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management
or
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to
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 about your lifestyle with
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well and accurate information.
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have
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 led to the decision-maker and leader to invest more in companies
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open AI
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OpenAI
 and xAI. In conclusion, I agree that
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internet
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the internet
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 and AI have improved
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people
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people's
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 lives in all aspects and save more time and
valued
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valuable
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people
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people's
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 efforts.

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coherence and cohesion
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Provide more examples and explanations to support your ideas.
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Make your introduction clearer and include a strong thesis statement.
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You have chosen a relevant and interesting topic.
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You provided some good examples about the internet and AI.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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