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The pictures below show the recycling process of wasted glass bottles.

The given illustration demonstrates the man-made process of recycling
wasted
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waste
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glass
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bottles
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 into new ones.
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, it is a cyclic process of transforming used
bottles
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 into new usable ones. The process consists of three stages starting from the transportation of used
bottles
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 to the
recycle
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 plant,
then
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 in the second stage the
bottles
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 are processed
and
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, and
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finally
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 the recycled
bottles
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 are sent to the supermarket for
the
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apply
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sale
of
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it
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.
To begin
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 with, in the first stage, the wasted
glass
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bottles
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 are collected and stored at a collection point
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then
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 with
means
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the means
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 of
transport
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transport,
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 it is transferred to the
recycle
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recycling
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 plant.
Subsequently
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, the
bottles
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 are passed through
high pressure
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high-pressure
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 water and forwarded to the
glass
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 factory on the basis of their colour, which is later broken into small pieces and burnt in a furnace at
the
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a
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 temperature of around 600-800
degree
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degrees
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celsius
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Celsius
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 to produce recycled liquid
glass
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.
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Finally
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 in the
last
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 stage, a mixture of both the recycled and new liquid
glass
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 is filled in a
glass
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 mould to give it a desired shape. The mould gives the
glass
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 its required shape
and
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then
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 it is delivered to the supermarket for
the
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apply
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sale
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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to the final consumer.

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task achievement
Add more details to explain each stage of the process. For example, describe what happens to the glass after it is broken into pieces.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to improve flow. For example, you can use words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to make your sequence clearer.
coherence cohesion
The essay clearly shows the recycling process in three main stages, which is a good structure.
task achievement
The introduction effectively outlines the main idea of the process, making it clear to the reader what the essay will discuss.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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