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Band 2.5

Some people think that boys and girls should attend school together. Others feel that they should be educated separately. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

There's no denying the fact that
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 an argument that other people
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 the topic from both
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 of view and express my opinion.
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studying
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, studying
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 to let
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both
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mixed schools .
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 ack here in Kuwait and many other schools that
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believe
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 gender school . Like the
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German
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that is
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 the most popular thing in Kuwait.
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 conclusion, there
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not
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task achievement
Improve the introduction by clearly stating both sides of the argument and giving your opinion more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Organize paragraphs better, and make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
task achievement
Use clearer examples to support your points, and explain why mixed or separate schools might be better.
positive
You make a good attempt to present both sides of the argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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