IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Some say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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people
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, the widespread use of
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internet
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the internet
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 through various platforms
make
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makes
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 it easier for
the
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people
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 to connect regardless of geographical barriers. Based on
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and will tell you how it
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 to
people
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 modern era. We know that
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this
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 is the age of modern science
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internet
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the internet
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 is the biggest facility for individuals to communicate with each other.
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, in
education
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sectors
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sector
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, the
broadly
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utilization
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 of
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internet helps the
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the internet helps
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 youngsters, teachers and students to communicate with each other. For
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 purpose,
zoom
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,
google meet
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Google Meet
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 and
teams
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 are
an
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excellent
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platforms
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 for academia to engage. In
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, I
also
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 attended various kinds of
meeting
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meetings
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 via online through
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internet
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the internet
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 and available platforms
which
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, which
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helps
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 me to pursue my degree.
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, the language translation tools on the
internet
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 help bridge
communication
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the communication
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 gap who speak different languages
making
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, making
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 communication
more
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apply
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easier.
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,
my
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apply
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most of
the
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my
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 emails
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apply
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 and documents are in Italian and German languages
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, and
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 these tools
helps
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help
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 me to understand the exact meaning and format of text to communicate
further
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 with persons.
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, making
a
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use of
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internet
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the internet
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 in a positive way will help to engage
people
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 more
closer
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 than in the
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past,
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where
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when
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 there
is
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was
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 no facility. It
also
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help
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helps
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 and
motivate
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motivates
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every age
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all ages
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person
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apply
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to use globally in
friendly
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a friendly
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 and economical way.

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task achievement
Your introduction has a good main idea, but it could be clearer. Make sure to directly state your opinion at the end of the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
You should add a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion. This will help give a clear ending to your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words like 'first', 'second', 'also', and 'finally' to connect your ideas better. This will help your essay flow more smoothly.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples to support your ideas, which is good.
task achievement
Your essay shows a clear understanding of the topic and why the internet helps communication, which is a strong point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant communication
  • geographical barriers
  • real-time video conferencing
  • physical distance
  • face-to-face interactions
  • online communities
  • forums
  • shared interests
  • sense of belonging
  • language translation tools
  • communication gaps
  • international communication
  • social media platforms
  • networking sites
  • personal relationships
  • workplace communication
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