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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. ​​Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given map illustrates the changes that took place in the harbour from 2000 until today.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that new facilities have been added in the harbour,
along with
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 the expansion of existing ones,
such
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 as docks, shops, and a hotel. Since that time, the harbour has undergone substantial redevelopment. The public beach on the north side remains, but the dock area has been expanded to include a second jetty for ferries. The fishing boats have switched places with the private marina. On the south side, cafés and shops have been built immediately to the east of the marina. Shower and toilet facilities have been added near the car park.
Finally
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, the old castle has been converted into a hotel, and the previously public beach has been made private for the use of its guests.

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conclusion
Ensure clear conclusion summarizing the main features of the changes in the harbour.
coherence
Try to use linking words to connect ideas more smoothly throughout the text.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or details to support your points better.
content
The overview gives a clear picture of the changes in the harbour.
specificity
The essay describes specific changes effectively, like the expansion and the new facilities.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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