The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows how much money overseas visitors spent in the UK from 1980 - 2010 and the pie charts show the reasons for their visits in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amount of money (measured in millions of pounds sterling)
tourists
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that tourists
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spent in the UK between 1980 and 2010,
while
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the pie charts compare the
reasons
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of
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for
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visits
in
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at
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the beginning and the end of the given period.
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, the amount of money overseas visitors spent in the UK increased notably
throughout
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over
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30
years
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30-year
period with considerable fluctuations and
peak
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a peak
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in
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apply
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around 1996. The main
reasons
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for travelling were mainly to spend holidays, followed by business purposes, visiting friends or relatives, and other
reasons
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. In
1980
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1980,
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the tourists spent around 8
billion
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pounds sterling
while
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visiting the UK.
This
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number reached a low of around 7
billion
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in 1982, followed by erratic fluctuations, before peaking at 12
billion
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in 1996.
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, the
spendings
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spending
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then
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decreased over time to around 10.5
billion
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in 2010. Regarding the
reasons
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for visit, holiday visits made up a considerable
proportions
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proportion
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in 1980 and 2010, at 44.1% and 39.1% respectively. Meanwhile, business purposes accounted for around 22% in both years,
whereas
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reasons
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for visiting friends or relatives increased from 18.7% to 28.2% and other
reasons
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decreased from 16.6% to 9.8%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • overseas visitors
  • significant rise
  • primary reasons
  • pie charts
  • holiday visits
  • business trips
  • visits to friends and relatives
  • expenditure
  • travel options
  • economic factors
  • tourism marketing strategies
  • global travel priorities
  • proportions
  • changing
  • correlate
  • reflect
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