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The table below shows the percentage of working men and women in different areas of employment in one country in 1986, 1996 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of working men and women in different areas of employment in one country in 1986, 1996 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure provides information about the percentage of employed males and females in different
employment
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 sectors in one country in 1986, 1996, and 2006. It can be seen from the graph that workers were employed in four fields
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 catering, banking, manufacturing, and education.
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, the
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 rates of
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 men and women in these sectors generally increased between 1986 and 2006. From the statistics, it can be inferred that manufacturing was the only sector where
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 declined for
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 genders over the 20-year period. Between 1986 and 2006, the proportion of men employed in catering grew moderately by 22%,
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 the percentage of women in
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 sector remained stable. Banking recorded a relatively high
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 rate for
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 male and female professionals. In 2006, the proportions of
both
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 employed in banking peaked at 21% and 19% respectively. In education, the percentage of male employees increased steadily by about 1% every ten years. Over the 20-year period, the highest
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 percentages for
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 groups were in catering (22%) and education (38%), respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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