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An increasing number of school provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What is the advantages and disadvantages?

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 era, most schools equip their
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 with electronic devices as
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laptops and etcetera rather than paper-based sources. In my view, it is a breakthrough, but there are
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drawbacks. Modern education
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 examine and
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as
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gadgets as
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 a teaching method for their learners through gadgets. The main reason why most tutors say it is a beneficial way , they are easy to handle.
Students
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 complain about the weight of books. In a day, almost 6 subjects
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 in most countries. It does mean that
students
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 should carry
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 of printed
work
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 with themselves
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 day. To produce books
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require
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 intense
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funding.
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, books are made from trees, it both harmful
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government
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the government
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 and
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. Researchers
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computer related
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computer-related
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 work
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 paper. Because it is reliable and compact.
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, electronic devices have shown their efficient sides to most educational systems and cheating
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 plummeted. The enthusiasm of most learners significantly increased.
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, electronic tools have affected to vision of
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 technique causes that issue. Teachers should not only educate them, but
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 they should provide instruction to youngsters. If learners spend much time
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studying,
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of
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them
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could deliberately face to
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. Over
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 they might get both obese and blind. Interestingly, before humans
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encounter
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with
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that problem
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through
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poor
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a poor
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 method. Even though whether it is
display
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 or paper, individuals need
take
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 care
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 their vision ability.
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 should allocate money
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 special instructors to provide knowledge about ways of preventing
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.
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, it depends on people themselves whether they should comply with
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the rules
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 or do whatever they desire. In conclusion, using
laptop
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 is completely normal if
students
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rules
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 as well. There should be
balance
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a balance
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 when using
electro
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electronic
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 devices. Paper usage requires money and
labor-intensity
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labour intensity
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. Computers are accepted to be a good way in
this
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new
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newly
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 developed
educating
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 system

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coherence and cohesion
Improve your paragraph structure. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences in the paragraph support this idea.
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Use clear and simple examples to support your points. This helps the reader understand your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar and sentence structure to make your writing more fluid and easier to read.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic, which shows good task response.
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You attempt to discuss both advantages and disadvantages, which adds depth to your essay.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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