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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better?

There is no doubt that these days the
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 important. The question is which one is better
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 give your reason? In
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opinion
. In terms of
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advantaged
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advantaged,
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 all
students
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uiforms
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uniforms
. The main reason to support
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, is that it is important to everyone to respect the policies of the
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to
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us the
students
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respectful
.
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,the
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choice
 the
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 of uniforms that
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represent
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this
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students
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 belong to what
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.
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 is because I think when the
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, that
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prement
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prompts
 the
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people
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to get to
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 know him.
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, I think the match of
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 is rest to the eye rather than a lot of
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. In conclusion, it is evident that some
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school
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schools
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 require
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students to
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 wear
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 uniforms,
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while other
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 schools
access
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allow
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students
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 to choose what to wear. I think the first one is better
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according
 to my reason.

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task achievement
Improve the introduction and make sure to clearly state your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should cover one main idea.
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Use more specific examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Check spelling and grammar. Words like 'uniforms' and 'respectful' need to be spelled correctly.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about school uniforms.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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