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Online learning is becoming more popular than attending traditional universities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

It is certainly true that online learning is popular than attending traditional universities.
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 not all the effects of
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 phenomenon have been positive,
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 there are certainly some advantages. There are several drawbacks
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 online learning . A common
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 is that it may lead to misunderstanding and
lack
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 of motivation.
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 the lack of direct teacher-student interaction. The other negative aspect can be unequal access to technology, as some
low income
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 families cannot afford
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 devices and internet access for their children. Students may face poor time management skills
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 online learning classes would be less effective. In spite of these negative effects,
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, digital learning has brought important benefits as well. One
such
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 advantage of online learning is that it
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flexability
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flexibility
 to
student
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, so
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they
 can access the learning content from anywhere and anytime. Another positive effect is that online learning
encourges
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encourages
 students to take responsibility
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 their education.
To sum up
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,
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 there are some obvious drawbacks to online
leaning
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, it has brought us many benefits at the same time. From my perspective,
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 believe that the advantages of
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 situation outweigh its disadvantages if students regulate it wisely and use it responsibly.

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You have discussed both advantages and disadvantages, which is good.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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