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Band 4.5

Your company introduced a work uniform that you are mostly happy with, except for one thing. Write a letter to your manager and include the following: – What do you like about the uniform? – What don’t you like about the uniform? – Make suggestions how to improve the uniform.

I hope
this
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 message reaches you in
your
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good spirits. Through
this
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correspondence
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 I would like to you in your good bring
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this
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apply
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to your attention that the new uniform for the
employee
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are
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has
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 arrived
and
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, and
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 as
a
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part of a survey, I have received
the
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Vaulable
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valuable
 feedback from them.
first
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 and foremost, they all like the colour & fitting of the clothes.
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, everyone
applaude
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applauds
 the concept of looking
same
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 and
Elimating
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eliminating
 the social Status difference.
Moreover
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,
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In
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 contrast to
that
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 we get to know majority of them are not happy with
size
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the size
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 of
logo
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the logo
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 printed at the front of the uniform.
Therefore
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,
its
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 a collective response to reduce the size of the Company icon and place it
to
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top
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the top
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 left corner, where the heart belongs. Which will
enventually
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eventually
 give it
more
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a more
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 decent look. Your prompt response to
this
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 matter would be highly appreciated. Should you
hve
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have
 any concerns, I
will
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would be
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please
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pleased
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 to assist you. Your faithfully Yuvraj

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas clearly into paragraphs.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone and correct spelling mistakes.
task achievement
You provided some positive feedback about the uniform.
task achievement
You suggested a clear improvement for the uniform.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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